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Devyn T Moore's avatar

I just started, and I just wanted to come and comment that I have really enjoyed your writing thus far. I am interested to see the magic system of runes and how that progresses as the story goes on. Great start!

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Shari's avatar

From what I've read so far, it looks like you have a fairly well-developed world here. The way you mentioned certain things without fully explaining them hints at depths of lore you haven't revealed yet. However, I did find it a little confusing to have all this action, and so many references to particular things, without any explanation. Of course you don't want to infodump, but I think a little explanation here and there could help readers make better sense of what's going on. I guess I'm just saying this chapter could benefit from a few more context clues.

Also, it was a little hard for me to tell who was doing what at times. But anyway, it sounds like it's all tied to something exciting.

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